From Cotton Fields.
Sorry for the delay on chapter two my editors, it was a tough and not satisfying job hunt, and traveling that lead to extention of time. I would like to thank Scottie don't for the help. I hope you find chapter one much improved scottie. also i really like the dialogue in chapter two it sounds authentic but the description needs some work. it's tough writing when you only get one hour at the library at a time to do it. i have already started chapter three and hope to have it done before my visit to Iowa with Mr. Derryberry
Some scenes to improve the your witisicm amazes me scene needs some work i think, aslo Gus and Eddie's conversation and the end of the chapter seems pretty on what do you think?
we are on the way to writing a great book fellows. i hope to see pages of help from Scottie, Jim, Zach, Braden, and Kyle by the time my companion and i visit your dwellings in Cedar Falls. While chapter one has been helped by scottie, further changes can be asked for and can be made. thanks again fellows
i hope my telling of this stroy is up to you high standards.
from the desk of Cotton Fields
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THE WHALES VAGINA 1&2
posted by The hipster Cedar rapids @ 7:23 AM
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i forgot the part about Tiff leaving out a do your dishes sign for the boys even though Her and greg are the only ones who used dishes at the house. So if someone wants to find a good place for that at the end of the chapter with the conversation between Gus and eddie that would great something like gus asking if they dirty up a bunch of dishes" and eddie asking why and then Gus telling him he had found the note for us to do the dishes.
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